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    dots Submission Name: The History of Maturitydots
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    Author: Narna
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 14/102/68
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe History of Maturitydots
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    Infancy was hard for me;
    I learnt to rely on myself
    before I could talk.
    Run, before I could walk.
    Years flew by like litter from
    the back of a garbage truck.
    Picked up in a light breeze,
    sucked back to earth by gravity,
    and repeatedly struck by
    peak hour traffic.
    (If food wrappers had hope; they'd pray
    for the gutter)
    Run-away themes; self loathing; crime;
    drug induced dreams; fantasy;
    dysfunctional family.
    I'm not what I imagined I'd be.
    If I'm a princess, then who's the queen?





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      I will enjoyed how this progressed. Even if the theme was somewhat melancholy I didn't get that completely hopeless looking for sympathy feeling. It shows that though this comes from a place less fortunate, there is talent, there is reality, and therefore hope. I feel like this was a good first read for me of your work as I am anxious to see what else you have to offer. A bit of a background story to prelude what I hope to be a turning of events toward something a bit easier on the spirit. That is to say I hope your future is a better experience and you have found more value in yourself than that of the metaphor for trash. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2016-08-25 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Colorful and thought provoking images here. Nice
    | Posted on 2016-05-22 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      There are some who believe she's the gold-digger married to the richest dude but I believe she's the sedate and surreal skeptic searching for loves sublime.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2016-05-22 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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