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    dots Submission Name: Starkdots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 53/167/176
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       There was an awful grammatical error In This write for over 2 months. Not one person said anything. So, basically it was a huge booger hangin' and everybody just stared. Cool, THANkS! All 222 of you's saw this massive booger. None of you are friends to me.


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    dotsStarkdots
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    Living ageless and restless
    looking beyond the corners of the walls
    and wondering when those stars will fall.

    Living ageless and ancient
    these needing feelings all around
    and abundant, like a tether or feathers
    living within close proximity of all.

    I can feel you nothing heals you
    let this love go to good use anyway
    leave my hunger lead my mother
    into this world of all your loving ways.

    Keep this hunger lead my father
    into your light and hopes everyday.

    Be the teacher feed the nature
    with all your loving ways.

    Be my brother and my hunger
    let love radiate all your days.

    Living fearless need to be this
    telling my mind this everyday.

    I am nothing
    a girl is nothing
    my face is faceless
    anyway.

    Be the hunger lead the hungry
    into your light and loving ways.

    Be the nothing feed the somethings
    as so many lived out their days.

    I can be nothing
    I can be fearless
    I can be a girl
    who's faceless
    with a heart
    of abundance.












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      Sorry you are having trouble ajusting to reality.
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