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    dots Submission Name: тревогаdots

    Author: lebeauvide
    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 75/295/165
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I tear myself into pieces
    Origami swans shredded into atoms
    Cleaved apart by my own hands
    Scrambling to make purchase against flesh

    This is not self harm
    This is a reminder that I am real
    Sometimes battle scars are self-inflicted
    Would you judge me if I told you that mine are?

    My heart races like a herd of mustangs
    Thundering down into the ravine,
    never to surface on the other side
    Trapped and left to starve

    This is the beginning of the descent
    Bear trap snapped around my brain
    Dragging me backwards into my own personal Hell
    Kicking and screaming the whole way

    I do not write poems anymore.
    This is my confession.
    Forgive me, father,
    for I will continue to sin.

    Submitted on 2016-05-24 21:58:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "This is not self harm
    This is a reminder that I am real"
    Forgive my defective vocabulary but fucking hell I couldn't possibly have worded it better.
    This write has every damn detail set to serve my current appetite; Food that I didn't know I wanted.

    I'm so glad that I read this after using my punching bag, otherwise I'd have put it off and wallowed in despair.
    Because I blew off my steam not too long ago, this piece makes me melt.
    It's reminded me that I am only one of many with these notions.

    BUT I definitely would have appreciated a little more...design to it - some color. It seems a little dry - a little tasteless, albeit relatable.
    | Posted on 2016-06-02 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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