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    dots Submission Name: Locketdots
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    Author: SumMalusHaec
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    Description:
       I sorta got this idea from listening to the song "Pirate Love Song" by Black Heart. Please listen to it, its so beautiful. Anyway I picture this woman/ghost origin story where she was betrayed and is going to try and find someone like her after casting off her chains.


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    Her hands,
    Clasping so tight a locket,
    Remember the memories.
    As fleeting as the waves across the sand,
    The promises, the secrets,
    They stay with her,
    Always.
    Alone and betrayed,
    She stands,
    Not to be afraid.
    The rain falls;
    Sheets and sheets,
    As if the sky itself
    Was wringing it hands
    In agony.
    If only
    She hadn't been alone
    That day the night fell.
    Her loves, running away,
    As if scared of her,
    Instead of the day.
    Now again alone,
    She stands.
    Casting off her fears,
    Her pains,
    And her sorrows,
    The locket is thrown away.
    With nothing left,
    Free,
    She wanders the open sea,
    If only
    To find another
    Like she




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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm going to take a gander at that song you so describe as "beautiful" - not only for the sake of seeing what you mean, but for the opportunity to be inspired as well. I'm missing that from my life at the moment, and I find that this connects me to the woman spoken of in this piece.
    Furthermore, what I would tell her is to try finding it somewhere else.
    | Posted on 2016-06-02 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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