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    dots Submission Name: Darkside (original draft)dots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 764
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    dotsDarkside (original draft)dots
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    I see the way your body moves.
    Glistening, so silky smooth.
    And I'm not trying to be your 1.
    Thought this all was just for fun.
    And baby who're you trying to fool?
    I've got memories to prove,
    That i've seen your type before,
    The type that's always wanting more.
    They compare me to the rest.
    And they know that i'm the best.
    Fall in love with dirty sex.
    They just want me cause i'm next.

    But then we get to loving.
    Christ! We sure are something.
    And she gets me fucking going.
    Its my heart that she is holding.
    And she squeezes it so much.
    But my body loves it tough.
    And the pain deals out it's touch.
    Who would've thought i liked it rough.

    Girl i know you feel alone.
    And in my bed you feel at home.
    But baby, you just want me cause i'm next.
    And you're trying to forget,
    He played your ass for a fool.
    You've got memories as proof.
    Don't fall for my dirty sex.
    Remember i warned you i was next?
    You weren't supposed to fall in love.
    Even though i know its tough.
    Cause i know that i'm the best.
    You just want me cause i'm next.

    But then we get to fucking.
    Shittt. That pussy sure is something.
    And i get her wet and sweaty.
    Her heart flatlines cause we're deadly.
    Heartbeats skip cause we're unsteady.
    Drugs and liquor have us ready.
    And the pain deals out it's touch.
    Who would've thought i liked it rough.




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