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    dots Submission Name: Sullen (Pt. 4)dots
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    Author: geekyslacker
    ASL Info:    28/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.34 - 64/41/14
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       My muse left this world only 20 months after I wrote this.


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    dotsSullen (Pt. 4)dots
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    Are you sitting sullen, as I realize I can't do without you?
    Do you feel annoyed, as I envision you?
    As you move, as you breath, as you blink.
    Do you watch from the inside, as I splinter without you?
    Do you endure my spirit, as I succumb to delirium?
    Declare your desires and fulfill your ambitions.
    I have judged the ins and outs.
    I have weighed the pros and cons.
    I will fight. I will believe. I will wait.
    I sit here sullen as I can’t think clearly anymore.




    Submitted on 2016-06-08 20:30:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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