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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 53/169/179
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Friendship
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    Being that of
    which you see
    The love that
    lies beneath.
    You embarrass me
    by saying
    What you ought
    not say.

    Retreat from a huge
    bite of
    Bbq pork
    sandwich.

    Peeling away
    The bun...

    'When's the last time
    you spooned your pork?'


    Loaded
    potato
    salad
    Bacon
    Cheese
    Midnight
    I hate me.

    Smiling.

    Thank you for your
    love's generosity.




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