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    dots Submission Name: Aryadots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 51/165/170
    Words: 6
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAryadots
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    Blind eyes
    Heightened
    InSight




    Submitted on 2016-06-14 22:56:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Sometimes I find writing daunting, in that
    the further you go the more likely you are to make a mistake

    when trying to render art against that absolute blueprint

    which is experience
    or how it was lived.

    So. I really liked this because everything works- i suspect
    i have heard something along the lines of what you have written but that's ok, i see this as personal expression and expression and I thought it was excellent and I appreciated the InS detailing
    because that allowed the last word to be read a couple of different ways. No waste. Good good.




    You could say blinded and lose eyes, but either way it's impressive and as a general note, I like that you've been experimenting with formatting in some of your poems, I think that's been effective and worth persisting with.



    | Posted on 2016-07-03 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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