Sometimes I find writing daunting, in that
the further you go the more likely you are to make a mistake
when trying to render art against that absolute blueprint
which is experience
or how it was lived.
So. I really liked this because everything works- i suspect
i have heard something along the lines of what you have written but that's ok, i see this as personal expression and expression and I thought it was excellent and I appreciated the InS detailing
because that allowed the last word to be read a couple of different ways. No waste. Good good.
You could say blinded and lose eyes, but either way it's impressive and as a general note, I like that you've been experimenting with formatting in some of your poems, I think that's been effective and worth persisting with.