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    dots Submission Name: Questioning Veggiesdots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 53/167/177
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsQuestioning Veggiesdots
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    Where's the carrots
    When the peas
    Are on their knees?


    Where's the peas
    When the carrots
    Have nowhere to be?


    Where's the carrots
    When the peas
    Don't believe?


    Where's the peas
    When the carrots
    Make their plea?








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      Something about this little write caught my eye. It would seem to me that there is a story here...and maybe it's not just about peas and carrots. Maybe.

    I would be very interested in knowing what your muse (or muses) was/(were) for your poem. Would you care to share? I always find it very interesting when a hear about what inspires other poets to create...

    As for critiquing your work...I would only say this (and it is a preference thing). Why not lower case the start of the third line of each verse? Since the second line leads into the third line as a complete sentence, it would just seem to flow better. Again, just my IMO.

    Thanks for sharing,

    K
    | Posted on 2016-07-10 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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