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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Lost my husband due to the disease of addiction... RIP David 10/7/76 - 6/8/16


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    I was never whole to begin with due to the childhood I was meant to have.
    Left my heart full of voids that are practically indescribable
    Yet when you came into my life somehow those voids became less hollow.
    Throughout the past ten years our time was full of love, happiness, and exploration of this world together…

    However, our lives did not always consist of contentment
    Our love more often than not was surrounded by desperation
    Our happiness was restricted by our personal heartaches

    Lifting one another up yet always there to pull each other down…
    This disease will do that to do people
    Unknowingly taking hostages

    Fast-forward to present day.
    Those hollow voids within my heart that you somehow were able to soften
    Have returned with some sort of vengeance.

    For I lost you.

    Lost you to an unexplainable disease that is never meant to make sense to me.
    No longer here to smooth out my jaded edges I acquired over time
    No longer here to spread your music you so lovingly expressed with those whom surrounded you in this life time…

    Though my loss for you will not be in vain
    For I will be sure everyone I know, knows your name
    Takes in your music
    Coming to love the soul, I fell in love with so very long ago….




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      You weave your feelings well into words with ryhme. I would suggest do not feel constricted to the rhyme. pauses... and silence... can be incorporated into any piece. Please don't take it as criticism.. I am just trying to offer another tool to you.

    You have honored a memory and for that we are honored to read it.
    | Posted on 2016-07-12 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad yet hauntingly beautiful. I reread it to try to understand your loss...and then I read the description. I am so very sorry. I believe you should always have kind words for people you come into contact with, regardless of the forum, because you never know what they're dealing with in their personal life. This is a beautiful tribute. I wish you peace.
    | Posted on 2016-07-12 00:00:00 | by Janesaddiction | [ Reply to This ]


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