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Submission Name: The Truth dots

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Author:	jackz
ASL Info:	24/F/OH
Elite Ratio:	3.76 - 591/623/381
Words:	116

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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RIP David G 10/7/76 - 6/8/16

The Truth dots

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I am engulfed into this whirlwind of feelings
All swirling around
Intertwining one another
Regret crashing into these deafening feelings of depression
As the anger thrashes against the sadness of my broken heart
Eventually all the
Would of’s
Could of’s
Should of’s
Trickle on in….

Making this a tsunami of consciousness
Consistently one extreme to the other.

My mind knowing the truth
Yet, my heart continues to believe the lie.
Eventually you’ll come home to us all....
I ache to believe this
I long for your presence

Ultimately I am left bargaining with whatever is out there..
Even if only to have a few more moments with you.

Submitted on 2016-07-12 06:51:01 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
This is a lovely poem...a confession of sorts, of how you are feeling - and what you are going through (to a point - but not revealing too much). No words can make you feel better - but know this: positive thoughts are heading your way. Give it time - they're heading your way.

Keep writing - it will help...

K
| Posted on 2016-07-12 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]

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