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    dots Submission Name: The Truthdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Truthdots
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    I am engulfed into this whirlwind of feelings
    All swirling around
    Intertwining one another
    Regret crashing into these deafening feelings of depression
    As the anger thrashes against the sadness of my broken heart
    Eventually all the
    Would of’s
    Could of’s
    Should of’s
    Trickle on in….

    Making this a tsunami of consciousness
    Consistently one extreme to the other.

    My mind knowing the truth
    Yet, my heart continues to believe the lie.
    Eventually you’ll come home to us all....
    I ache to believe this
    I long for your presence

    Ultimately I am left bargaining with whatever is out there..
    Even if only to have a few more moments with you.




    Submitted on 2016-07-12 06:51:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a lovely poem...a confession of sorts, of how you are feeling - and what you are going through (to a point - but not revealing too much). No words can make you feel better - but know this: positive thoughts are heading your way. Give it time - they're heading your way.

    Keep writing - it will help...

    K
    | Posted on 2016-07-12 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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