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    dots Submission Name: Lose Yourselfdots
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    Author: TheJadedCritic
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 3/4/5
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 570
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    Description:
       * A modified version of the poem, "A Universe of Promises," by metallichick786.


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    dotsLose Yourselfdots
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    I lost myself the other day
    Inside of your abyss:
    In a whirlwind of confusion
    I began to reminisce
    The years have flown like empty woes
    They're withering with age
    Yet still I try to free my mind
    Within my heart's own cage
    I soothe the ache that pains in me
    With my own remedies
    Without success I always turn
    Back to your entity
    Your imprint is a mystery,
    One that I can't shake free
    The ties you've bound
    Can hold no ground
    For I'll never walk free
    I contemplate, commemorate
    A time that we once loved
    A fallacy of normalcy
    That I can't help but found
    A star fell on a starless night
    It shot me through the air
    Within its fire burning bright
    I rode inside your hair
    Past planets and past galaxies
    I saw the once unknown
    A memory of everything
    Inside my mind was sewn
    I turned around
    To see the world
    So bleak and oh so small
    How thankful
    To the star I was
    For bringing me this far
    How thankful
    To the star I was
    For taking me away
    And promised
    Not to lose myself,
    At least not for today




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    | Posted on 2016-07-16 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Hum, superior alien beings, a positive wanderlust of phantasmagoria.

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