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    dots Submission Name: ~*Broken*~dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
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       RIP David 10/7/76 - 6/10/16


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    dots~*Broken*~dots
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    I lay here wide eyed and weary
    Asking myself will these thunderous screams ever simmer down?
    As if I am drowning from it all
    Slowly suffocating

    How can this be?
    So many people surround me
    Yet,
    I am drowning in the fears
    Suffocated by the truths

    Barricaded myself into this oblivion
    Running only on autopilot
    My days seem to come and go

    This heavy heart continues to carry me
    Afraid to propose the question, yet I do,
    How long can this fractured heart of mine go on like this?

    ....

    Lost within this oblivion
    Nothing remains but that of memories
    Hollowness from within
    Where these cries only seem to echo…




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      Praying for you loss and hoping that you find comfort in your grief. This piece is a great testimony to that pain and I am sorry that it is something you are going through.

    Thank you for sharing.
    God Bless.
    | Posted on 2016-07-17 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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