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    Author: Narna
    Elite Ratio:    1.74 - 14/102/68
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Faith numbs at the extremities;
    Limbs clutch the edifice;
    a stiff breeze.
    Breathe.
    Inhale; desperation.
    Respiration, please.

    Heaven meets the horizon, and
    refuses to shake hands.
    Hanging out for a promised land-
    slide; letting go.

    New beliefs weather old demands;
    erode the sands of time.
    Falling out of love, and
    in to the sublime
    truth.






    Submitted on 2016-07-23 16:56:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Soldered joints
    Weak at the knees.
    Topple my tree with the slightest breeze.
    They need just about all I can't give
    After panning me through their silver sieve.
    I don't pray much but I know when I'm alive
    I can't keep traditions 'cause I keep them all inside.
    You know just about all that I know
    When it comes to sorting out which way that I should go
    'Cause I...
    Shake Shake
    The wind blowing
    A storm still waiting back behind
    It's always over me
    Taking its toll

    This lyric is from the song Silver Sieve, by Snowmine. It was my #1 song of 2014. I couldn't help but think of it when reading your poem.

    I think you should drop "truth" down a line though so it stands on its own.
    | Posted on 2016-07-25 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]


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