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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.15 - 51/165/170
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I dunno winker's always command your attention. So ya, I winked. Said the winker, 😏.




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    I told Timmy today.



    I told him cold hearted
    about you
    Departing.

    I felt like such an asshole

    Saying " You didn't know?"

    I knew.

    I knew he didn't know.

    Then he asked if I went to your funeral

    I replied " no it wasn't like that. He was cremated.
    I couldn't it wasn't formal. "

    Then I asked myself
    " what the fuck is formal
    About a funeral?"


    'When I look up to the moon
    The circles will be you,
    Shinning endlessly.'

    I miss you.

    I thought I heard your voice the other day
    My neck almost snapped.

    One year
    26 days
    my friend.
    Its been
    tough.

    I am happy that
    your ashes
    Made it to
    Jerusalem.

    I wonder
    What all of that
    Means anyway.

    For me from the time we met
    Til the time you left
    You were one third
    Of my life.

    And because of that
    Third.
    I now have
    Wrinkles.

    From
    Laughing.

    Wrinkle.
    Wink.





    6-11-16 6:14 am










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