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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    A very far away, a gentle moon was shining bright, snowflake-like
    one starless night, my lone heart learns
    to love -

    again;

    you arrived,
    when love for self a ghost
    everyone talks about, but unseen;

    but

    one day in autumn,
    a soft day it was,

    tears soaked sun
    a gloomy september visited -

    september is always so sad;

    our baby arrived
    breathless,
    anoush;

    you had wished her to die,
    and she did - a daddy's girl
    your wishes were her dreams - she left; a good traditional girl -
    you liked traditions -
    not standing up for right -
    scared of

    greedy family;

    in your world -traditional,
    follow without asking;

    your private vows were words and
    my heart believed,
    so naive your songs, your words and your soul,

    when your owns - as you called them,
    cursed and moaned,
    succumbed under pressure
    when your immaturity shone through -
    you cursed and moaned too

    you gave in their greed
    and
    gave up our love;

    i miss our baby.

    one day -
    when sun shines bright -
    and hope it leads you to
    us - our angel daughter and me, waiting and praying.
    and
    hope you have apologies.
    for a new september.




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