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    dots Submission Name: My Great Dividedots
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    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsMy Great Dividedots
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    I feel so betrayed, living like a dream, there's something in the way, the way I make you scream. Something's got to give, A slap in my face, I just cant forgive, and you know I love to give. You know I love the pain, you know I love the pain, create my own, I always do. Your love, is just like a scorpion, when it stings, and it stings, the beauty in the pain that it brings.
    oh my baby , so upset, I can make you so damn wet. I am broken, you know I live a life of shame, hang my head in artistic isolation, as I wallow in my pain, Please be just a dream, oh baby, please be just a dream.
    I remember, your fucking mess, Find a naked man in my bed so I bust his head, and you know that I am alone, cold as ice man I am a stone, you cant break what has no home, you cant break what's all alone, am too strong for this. Scars on my heart until the day I die, with your little masochist ways and my darkened lullabies

    But I learned to love this great divide, what is mine is never mine, somewhere in the shadows until I reach that great divide. Burn it bright for me, give something more, like purity, maybe this is just a dream, maybe this is just a dream. As I will it, so mote it be, so mote it be, so mote it be




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