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    dots Submission Name: Stem-boweddots
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    Author: Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 5/13/19
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    It seems so long since I was by your fireside
    Dreams like lily of the valley rising,
    Earthly shadows moving across the tiles;
    The soil in my heart was about to flood

    But the stem-bowed flowers take stiff breaths in the city
    A hesitation: so no-one can arrange them wrong.
    I miss the lane were the woman used to sell eggs,
    Where the humiliation at the end of the lane pales

    With these rain dowsed stones that damn my every step
    Stinking chests of anxiety, blotting the bottom of rivers

    It’s In the death pangs of some wounded deer
    Whose pupils are the alley you walk through
    the August Summer in your hair, your bells bloom
    While all my guts have disappeared.

    I spend my time looking into electric fires
    Till advent clouds come flowing through the window
    It's then I feel the shadows move across the tiles
    And every feint remembrance makes me tremble.




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