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    dots Submission Name: utopiadots
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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    a play,
    breaking hearts,
    causing pieces to fracture a fragile hope,

    your play -
    weak love and weaker promises,

    why - sometimes think,
    blame naive,
    childlike,
    fairy-tale,
    utopian letters of soulmate and
    love,

    you gave in to manipulative
    schemes of them,

    i hope one day -
    your heart turns the colour
    of my heart today,

    but -
    instead,
    i wait and hope,
    this fairy tale
    have its surprising utopia.




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