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    dots Submission Name: Torn-a-do dots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 53/167/176
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTorn-a-do dots
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    Mood: The Usual

    A particle can exist as two things.



    Serving as a duality.



    In both physics and geometry.






    Is this the ultimate multitasker?



    Of course!



    Wave particle duality
    might
    Collide with your
    Personality.


    Shinning light within your being
    Of you



    and
    You
    solely
    captivate
    me







    Like the on looker of something grande.







    All the signs point towards _____




    Submitted on 2016-08-22 23:59:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Particles, waves, and physics...oh my!

    I enjoyed the inter-weaving of personality with physics in this little write. Nicely done...

    This line caught my eye...

    and
    You
    solely
    captivate
    me

    Maybe it just stood out because of how you placed it against all of the other lines? Or maybe it talks to something else (and that's what caught my eye). In any case, I liked it.

    I did have one question about this line...

    Like the on looker of something grande.

    Did you mean to say "grand" and not "grande"? Just curious...

    Thank you for sharing,

    K
    | Posted on 2016-08-24 00:00:00 | by krs3332003 | [ Reply to This ]


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