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    dots Submission Name: Lunation & Loversdots
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    Author: krs3332003
    Elite Ratio:    6.45 - 142/113/63
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I was scribbling this afternoon - some folks doodle.


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    dotsLunation & Loversdots
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    The moon, breaking free from the day
    must serve the night – prisoner of the sky
    Kept only by light, in pieces & phases
    Yet dominion is hers, for her time
    new to full
    She reflects all that is given
    Slave and Master
    Divine temptress – wax and wane
    Children shall worship her
    so must we all, in our own way
    The oceans will bow
    coming in – coming out: it's relative
    Breathless and spent
    covered with her glow
    As lovers should be...

    2016 Kelly R. Sullivan




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      the moon truly doesn't get old, does she. I write about her and mention in so many of my poems. She is my mid-night mistress and my sun.


    I really like this write. Its hefty written and has some really cool lines.

    well, done.

    JP
    | Posted on 2016-11-21 00:00:00 | by rev.jpfadeproof | [ Reply to This ]
      The first two lines are excellent and made me think this could easily be made into a rhyming poem.

    The moon breaks free from the day:
    In pieces and phases she serves the night
    O'er bountiful oceans she holds sway
    A prisoner of the sky, kept only by light...

    Writing about (and looking at) the moon never gets old.

    :)

    Erin
    | Posted on 2016-09-01 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]


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