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    dots Submission Name: She Said I Fell Offdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 559
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    dotsShe Said I Fell Offdots
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    So I still have my gift I write
    No walls, but white paper in sight
    You can come in to my dark room
    No light
    I'm still here I'm alright
    I won't go down without a fight
    Pass that on like a prison kite
    You miniature,
    No height
    While I still come with that hype
    Still dream under all this California mist
    Yeah you said I fell off
    Girl figure it out
    ALL my life I've been on a precipice




    Submitted on 2016-09-11 20:48:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's always been more of a parapet for me but I can definitely relate gazing from my mirador bartizan at the panoramic tableau below.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2016-09-12 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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