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    dots Submission Name: Once Again Be Bluedots
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    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 624
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    dotsOnce Again Be Bluedots
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    Designed for Day
    forsaken by night
    Every whisper is heard
    Given to her for sight

    He haunts her rooms
    To entice the mind
    To steal her heart
    To keep him alive

    Given by chance
    Should they meet
    Would he portray
    The love she keeps

    A vision, a gift
    Of true love delight
    A dove with wings
    Waiting her flight

    She wonders the halls
    Waiting for her cue
    Looking for a reason
    to once again be Blue

    Only freedom comes
    When he sets her free
    Breaking the strings
    That binds her to he




    Submitted on 2016-09-12 08:04:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey this is very good it could be a dark space
    looking for the lite
    or a lite space wanting to be free
    i liked it alot
    sandman
    | Posted on 2016-10-13 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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