Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Once Again Be Bluedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 720
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 693



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsOnce Again Be Bluedots
    -------------------------------------------




    Designed for Day
    forsaken by night
    Every whisper is heard
    Given to her for sight

    He haunts her rooms
    To entice the mind
    To steal her heart
    To keep him alive

    Given by chance
    Should they meet
    Would he portray
    The love she keeps

    A vision, a gift
    Of true love delight
    A dove with wings
    Waiting her flight

    She wonders the halls
    Waiting for her cue
    Looking for a reason
    to once again be Blue

    Only freedom comes
    When he sets her free
    Breaking the strings
    That binds her to he




    Submitted on 2016-09-12 08:04:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      hey this is very good it could be a dark space
    looking for the lite
    or a lite space wanting to be free
    i liked it alot
    sandman
    | Posted on 2016-10-13 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    201466

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Wavelength written by saartha
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Giving written by jjd
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    This written by Chelebel
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    Bond written by saartha
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Push written by JanePlane
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    To written by SavedDragon
    Linger written by saartha
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry