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    dots Submission Name: I am not.dots

    Author: nwproud
    ASL Info:    27 / vancouver, wa
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 280/243/64
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       10 years ago I was deployed in support of OIF. A lot happened over the course of a year, nothing expected. Life works itself out, though. I always felt like I had something to write about back then, now, its a little different.

    (work in progress, I've not really been an active contributor for quite some time...)

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    dotsI am not.dots

    We've each our reasons
    for decisions made
    in haste,
    in hiding.

    A world apart, even.

    How clear was I?
    A fool's effort made
    in the midst of my own mistake.

    As for you...I'll let you alone.
    The entirety of my life
    having served its purpose
    in what would amount
    to an eclipse of a decade.

    It's gone, forever.

    For all the right reasons
    you are there, and I,

    I am not.

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      Living in a memory / unable to explain/ how liquid years solidify/ like pinpricks in younger brains/ and yet I dance between the thoughts/ that are, yet shouldn't be/ like ancient glaciers full of weight/ unmelted on the sea...

    Just a few thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2016-09-25 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

    Yes, indeed, a few things have changed here over the years. Since you have changed too, it is a revolving wheel. I have never served in the military, but I cannot imagine too many things with the potential to change a person more abruptly or completely. It sounds like you are adapting though, which is good and should show you a piece of the strength of your character.

    We all do things and then look back and wonder if it was for the best. Our reasoning in any given moment sort of just is, and then we have to move on within whatever unfolds... one of life's more challenging aspects.

    As for the poem, I agree with Pietro. There is a music to this; a melody that most probably reflected an inner flow. Changes in life have a tendency to upset creativity, maybe like a shaker containing grains of different sizes. It might not come out the same because it's settled different, but it's all there and in a new configuration.

    No matter what conclusions you have come to since deciding to serve, I have no doubt you did so in search of a greater good both for humanity and for yourself. Thank you for being one of our braver souls.


    | Posted on 2016-09-14 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]
      There's a rhythm in this. I can definitely hear it, in both spoken and read. Like it has it's own internal meter. It hits the spot for me? I mean it strikes a balance, where all the notes do not overpower each other or something.

    The simplicity and depth that all your words have here is such a treat to read.

    Thanks for posting this. I truly enjoyed reading your piece for the third time now.
    | Posted on 2016-09-14 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]

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