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    dots Submission Name: eight:twenty-sevendots
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    Author: isabella
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       can't seem to write anything these days. guess we all gotta start somewhere.


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    dotseight:twenty-sevendots
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    it's the twenty-third and august is coming up on her big three-oh. i wonder if she'll have a bash, celebrate september-ness, or the fact that halloween is hiding just down the road.

    couldn't tell ya.

    though i know goldfinch-leaves are leaving. flying, really. their summer skins don't feel like clinging anymore to those brown as anything limbs. they wanna chirp. be pretty. twirl and swirl away. like the birds

    they pretend to be.






    Submitted on 2016-09-15 07:28:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Now there is a bit of organizational writing. How you have made the leaves into a bird - and September into a woman before her thirtieth birthday was done quite well.

    But I must say, Halloween hides from no month...lol

    Pleasure to read

    BFB
    | Posted on 2017-01-18 00:00:00 | by babyfacebarlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Isabella.

    Glad to see you are posting.

    It is something to work through the kinks when you have a creative block. Sometimes doing freewriting exercises helps, especially if you can clear your mind of having any expectations of how your writing is going to turn out. It's challenging though.

    I swear I have spaces of years when I just can't put pen to paper.

    I love the idea of the Autumn leaves pretending to be birds. The idea that something so fleeting and impermanent might long to be real.

    :)

    Erin
    | Posted on 2016-09-15 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]


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