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    dots Submission Name: Givers give, while the takers take.dots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.07 - 48/165/170
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I love the givers. I have met a few in my life and they will forever be appreciated. One in particular, will never be forgotten. He gave so much, I think he surpassed his own expectations.


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    dotsGivers give, while the takers take.dots
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    You have plenty
    to eat,
    fill your belly,
    once upon your table
    Lay the biggest pig
    from out past the stables.




    Porky to be exact
    needing, more and more
    and wanting to give less
    And less
    becoming an ultimate taker
    and never being a giver.





    Givers, a place within the heart,
    deep inside you can't embark
    upon a journey or travel there.
    You must embrace the courage to be.


    Takers , need I say more?


    The givers are the Angels
    that live amoung us.
    The ones who continue
    to place those cherries
    on top and splatter
    the sprinkles to
    create your wrinkles. :)






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