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    dots Submission Name: Drivedots
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    Author: Pietro
    ASL Info:    30/m/cebu
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 298/175/36
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 375
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 298



    Description:
       Been working with younger people, so I end up being the older most times.


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    dotsDrivedots
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    Are we there yet?

    It's now isn't it?
    I wanted to feed grapes
    to children
    and drink wine
    from a mug

    There, the bed and breakfast

    I can see it past the steering wheel
    over hands I don't recognize anymore




    Submitted on 2016-09-16 10:03:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's a disorienting experience, the one of getting older. It can take a while for the way you feel inside to catch up to your actual age, or maybe catch on to it (i my body told me I was getting older, but my brain didn't get the memo) and maybe sometimes it never does.

    One thing I have found strange is watching old reruns of some show I loved in the 80s or early 90s, and realizing with a shock that while I once related to the kids in the show, I now relate more to the parents. The kid in me thinks it's all gross and creepy, but the adult in me sees the humor in it too.

    Time is different to kids, it seems. Like when summer seemed to go on and on, and being told to wait an hour was like the end of the world.

    Appreciated the read, and was glad for the short description too. It was a nice little snapshot into the world of an adult.

    Erin

    | Posted on 2016-09-27 00:00:00 | by BlankSheet | [ Reply to This ]
      Will we be there soon?
    I've seen the moon
    in my cracked rearview
    a time or two...

    We've been on this road forever
    100 seconds or more
    this waiting is deplorable
    like the self-check at a store

    his grizzled hands amaze me
    as they try to find their way
    down a thousand crooked alleys
    to the path all full of grace...

    Just a thought on yours.
    | Posted on 2016-09-18 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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