I'm a big fan of Observer Drift. Their album 'Corridors' was one of my favorites of 2012. Actually that was a great year for independent music.
You have a wonderful idea here, of listening to a song and writing some words of your own to complement it. A poem might serve the music better than some of the lengthy, meandering, and imprecise blurbs people sometimes write about music. A poem has a tune of its own, and yours definitely slides along to its own rhythm.
There is a bit of a small glitch for me at the word "intersect." "Sunny twangs of delicious moments" is lovely, but after reading this, the word "intersect" kind of stuck out as though it didn't belong. It was an anomalous island in your ocean. If you add the word "as" it may help the transition to the next clause:
small sunbeams brush the edge of morning
a tumblin' wave creeps up to the shores of your mind
buzzing voices in the distance, a thrum of excitement
penetrates the snoozy vibes
slow day, lazy day, sunny
twangs of delicious moments intersect
as dusk leaves a purple trail
* splits ゜ *・
・゜ ミ☆ 。
I have a feeling this isn't about precision for you just now, just my thoughts :)
I love what you have going on here. Listening to the track, it feels to me that your words are a hushed tone compared to the pop-brightness of the song. The song is a Saturday, early evening and your poem is Sunday, in no particular hurry. Well done.