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    dots Submission Name: Come Homedots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.08 - 366/364/154
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 371
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Quick write for a girl I foolishly sent away


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    dotsCome Homedots
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    Tonight even Evening seems vaster without you

    The moon shivers upon her axis of stars
    And my verse falls like Icarus upon the immense blue earth

    The weight of your absence sits upon my chest like the ocean
    From her depths you emerge elegant and wrap my body in your own

    In Self-destruction lies self-discovery --- So

    I am the flame and the moth
    The stone that shatters beneath its own weight

    The pine tree that bears the lonely lark perched at mid-night
    To sing the song of the abandoned

    My hands are archeologists searching for the diffuse of your exist
    My heart senses you in the dark distance where space and time are suspended
    My tongue heaves for you in the night recesses like the butterfly heaves to shed his cocoon

    But you are gone, Kita- and it is I
    That has sent you into the faded winter prairie
    It is I that sent you into the refuse of night

    But I will hope in your love…
    I will bath in dust until you arrive like the spring
    I will remember you as my dove of mercy and look for you in each purple sunset

    Kita, Kita, Kita…
    My Kita

    Please Come home

    DiCicco Cosentino




    Submitted on 2016-09-20 21:18:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I will not say goodbye to you Kita,
    though I wish to say hello
    and look upon you as a ghost would,
    hoping you'd say my name in private


    Reasons that have yet been made clear to me
    have locked you out and I threw away the only key
    with all might my arm could muster
    into a field of tall grass
    from a path I did not memorize


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    Thanks for the read jp! Great to see you again. bill is here. Is it 2007 again?

    Hope you're doing good too.
    | Posted on 2016-09-21 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]
      "But you are gone, Kita- and it is I
    That has sent you into the faded winter prairie
    It is I that sent you into the refuse of night

    But I will hope in your love…
    I will bath in dust until you arrive like the spring
    I will remember you as my dove of mercy and look for you in each purple sunset"


    and I will hope in my sanity
    as it wriggles and strains
    like a child, to escape
    the cruel bonds
    of an inborn fear
    I miss my angel
    wish you were here...
    | Posted on 2016-09-20 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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