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    dots Submission Name: Sharper Imagedots
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    Author: redthewitch
    ASL Info:    36/f/tiny rural village
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 267/175/26
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dots Sharper Imagedots
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    cornfields and coppice
    saturated greens and golds
    manifested
    by a metamorphosis of light
    shadows grow longer
    and black
    under a sky no longer
    Summer's blue
    but the wistful hue
    of Autumn




    Submitted on 2016-09-23 22:31:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I had to look up what coppice means. I guess you're never too old to learn something new! I enjoyed this small poem, it was like a breath of fresh air.
    | Posted on 2016-10-20 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      The imagery is so... sharp ;)
    For lack of a better word, haha.

    Throughout this poem, my brain sees a gradient of warm, rich tones. Though it's spring here, I can feel the cosy warmth of Autumn.

    It is interesting that the title of your poem is Sharper Image, yet my silly head sees fuzzy hues, and a general feel of mulled reds and browns. Every line, to me, is a brand new colour, and with that, new symbolism.


    "cornfields and coppice"
    (I see coppery browns, despite the cornfields being yellow. I guess I think of the word "copper" from coppice)

    before leading into bright yellows and lights. A new day begins. I see a blue sky. Not quite that super bright blue, but that sort of darker cloudless sky. I dunno, I live in the tropics, we see a different sky, perhaps.

    The air is crisper.

    This "critique" is so unstructured and poorly organised, I'm sorry. My mind is a cluttered mess of china plates teetering on the edge of a precipice.

    Reading this calmed me down. It's nice to slow down and read, sometimes.

    Thanks for sharing! Hope you are well :)

    -Esha
    | Posted on 2016-09-27 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]


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