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    dots Submission Name: ba da ba da bop!dots
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    Author: hyproglo
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 180/258/153
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsba da ba da bop!dots
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    Fourth time cleaning up all that you couldn't carry

    So pure
    as it exits
    in mud

    Serenade vanity in feet of clay
    No one is happy
    when you smile
    while proclaiming
    you've lost your mind

    C'mon
    C'mon
    C'mon

    Silence only goes...
    nowhere

    "You ask, I deliver"
    Home

    Time eased the heaviness of the curtain which was drawn

    How eloquent it looks
    Emancipated
    Thankful
    Breathing

    Did anyone ever look?
    Look?
    (Away)

    The lord of the house has no servants
    Bless-ed be his flame

    Cower my children in the distance
    Lick your wounds

    This twilight's the dawn of your life

    Sweetened
    By the ride

    Sunshine cannot frown upon it.

    Waterfalls cannot drown it

    Yet here we sit

    Counting all the moments that make up the room
    Missed me?
    I'm perfect.
    Over there

    Don't stare too long.
    You'll find nothing new.

    Though everything is better than what was.

    Had

    Untwisted broken moments
    Were meant to be

    Unchallenged
    and bent




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    | Posted on 2016-11-05 00:00:00 | by mayBL8R | [ Reply to This ]
      that was a good ride from start to finish. In the beginning it was a bit blues-y to me but took turns in all kinds of directions. I didn't know where I was a headed!

    Favorite part:
    How eloquent it looks
    Emancipated
    Thankful
    Breathing


    thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2016-09-24 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]


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