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i love you poems for him


Author: ankur5421
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i love you poems for him



Love lies in the wake of day dreams where mystery and fantasy collide.

Where the flowers of hope are rooted in ugly reality the subside.

closed doors and locked walls where freedom used to exist.

Barred windows and razored fences now freedom is but a myth.

She held you heart while held http://lovepoemsforherhim.com/top-10-love-poems-for-him.html this pen.

Please tell me where she stops so at last I can begin.

I resonate in the lyrical sound that boasts from your lips.

And you became dazed at the slightest sway of my hips.

Our love lies in heat in a sweaty summer daze.

Were our love was hard to see through smog and the haze.




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  Is this an original work or something that you admired and wanted to share with the group? The imagery is nice but there do seem to be a few missing words that send the meaning of some lines off course.

| Posted on 2016-11-14 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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