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    dots Submission Name: Believe What You Wantdots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 53/167/173
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       It was exactly how it was meant to be. " I think back on your spotlight kisses."


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    dotsBelieve What You Wantdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Every time
    I saw you.

    So I pondered,
    was the taste
    that sweet?

    Or was the
    addiction that
    important?

    Or, was the
    weakness
    that week?


    And Yet I
    pondered some more
    and it lead me into lilac and
    lavender fields of grey.


    Where the laundry was meant to be
    seen by the passer by in the streets
    and the strangers would gleam from
    behind the scenes.


    Or was it
    Truth?
    Purity?
    Insecurity?

    A controlling
    Nature
    not so
    nature-esk
    in deed.


    Cobble Stone walls with graffiti
    and Narcissistic selfies taken.

    All cameras pointing towards
    action
    and the highlight of the night
    your reaction.

    I think back on your
    Spotlight kisses
    and embrace the
    remembrance.

    But this does not
    mean you are
    past tense
    or a has been,

    It only means
    I think of you
    Often.















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      "was the addiction that important?"

    Probably so, otherwise this batch of words wouldn't be written and the subject matter wouldn't refuse to be confined to the past tense. It may, however, be relegated to the now and forever tense, but that's only what I gather from the tone.
    | Posted on 2016-10-28 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the format of this poem, I tend to use weird patterns like these in my poems too although I'm much more strict with it. Good write!
    | Posted on 2016-10-20 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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