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    dots Submission Name: Wild Herd of Elephant Dreamersdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWild Herd of Elephant Dreamersdots
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    We share the air in a dormant state
    it's matted heat we breathe deep, and out
    we stomp and jeer and flomp about
    flapping ears and flailing snouts
    while,
    all elated at the way the water sways
    and the shadows dance,
    treasured young wander too far off
    and dusk is fast approaching
    tromp and reer and back to the river
    one last draught and bath before
    standing nestled to each other
    resonate low trunken goodnights
    dream




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