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    dots Submission Name: Somberdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSomberdots
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    I caught her quiet in a lounging tee-pee
    Dropped my jaw and started over,
    Tried to scoop up my chin but my tongue
    Hadnt tasted her name in ages
    Overeager wondered "Kelsea"
    Was wide-eyed shocked and barely
    Able to face her after the silences
    Beautiful and mystic, transient but shiftless
    She showed surprise and focused moments
    On me frozen before speaking.
    I sat beside and we shared little
    Besides presence
    But that was a lost appreciation
    Four minutes and she got called
    Said off, and
    stood then offered me a hug
    That was both a hello
    and goodbye




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