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    dots Submission Name: Praise the Sunburst Phoenixdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 353
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPraise the Sunburst Phoenixdots
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    Awake and am one inferno incarnate
    searing wings beat dead
    the air so low it shudders
    sheering atmosphere clear out while rising
    feather tips bright as new sun yellowed
    rusting into modest mellowed merigold
    then hinting honey before settling orange
    followed ironically by apple
    which ripens hue to scarlet
    at dusk sets to blood garnet
    which cools finally to burgundy

    My wings alone cast enough shades
    darkened by every age and awesome madness

    My core is living fire
    binding my body and my fate
    igniting every quill aflame
    and I still nest where I loosed
    gave myself to time and an open mind
    closed around rhyme or reasoning
    defined by the vibrancy of being
    in reckoning tilt my head back and cry
    it pierces fathomless and reverberates
    finally lessening with guttural squawks
    still resonating with high noon.

    My shadow is hiding under my span
    straight down so I, above, can stage omen

    The day grows hotter and I molt each night
    into ashes, scattered dust on the wind
    until then my colors crispen and at evening fade
    my plumage full embered down
    eyes like white hot coals, glaring
    more calm than angry, but ever wary
    mortality is worn to walk this world
    and though I'll manage to peace rebirth
    still death is frigid agony inherent
    suffering snuffed out like a candlewick
    soul struggles to find home in a carcass

    I know it's art, but all combustible
    straight through to my heart, it's all trusted

    At night I smolder and hiss with the cool
    fools think it's running water and chase
    before realizing the magnitude of their mistake
    but I am passive, claw the dirt in rashness
    then resign to let them pass and fly
    up to where the stars are spindles to the sky
    and the lunar wane is welcomed
    I weary spinning terra firma through time
    and burning away with my every cherished anything
    until left with quiet and so to nest return
    jagged cliffstone and thorough-soaked thatch

    Let weighted elements fall into the sea
    air the final wisps and perch in sleep




    Submitted on 2016-10-02 17:51:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very nice write. I wish I could offer you a criticism or a word of advice, but I think I am coming from the angle more as an admirer. This write had a multitude of depth and layers pulling you in and igniting the imagination to the picture. Maybe even an animation of clawing at the dirt in a very passive way as if you were a cock. A tumble weed rolling by during the clawing action. Nice write.
    | Posted on 2016-10-02 00:00:00 | by Chelebel | [ Reply to This ]


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