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    dots Submission Name: the greatest fortunedots
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    Author: halopop
    ASL Info:    25/f/FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 167/141/21
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 520
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    Bytes: 319



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       something i wrote for someone beautiful


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    dotsthe greatest fortunedots
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    summer nights
    and winter mornings
    tasting each drop of springtime on her skin
    making tears of happiness fall from the golden autumn sky
    she make me live a little above myself
    far away from the shadows
    suspended beyond reality
    in an existence no one can touch...




    Submitted on 2004-02-16 20:13:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      fifi...i still have yet to find the time to read all of your work, but i am making it a point to finish eventually lol...i don't know why, but i just feel at peace when i read what you have created, i hope you find your happiness, and i hope it never lets you go.
    | Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by Sky McEntire | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the interwoven seasons. i like the evident creativity... would like to see better more original imagery than the over used golden sky... other than that this piece reeks of talent and potential... nice job keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-02-16 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm... let's see... i like this! you've woven the seasons neatly in the first four lines. and how you feel comes out wonderfully in the next four (even though it's a little clichéd - i think it's how you feel)

    (i think you mean "makes" in line five. and "suspended above reality" in line 7 would have suited better...)
    | Posted on 2004-02-16 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]



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