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    dots Submission Name: Innocencedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsInnocencedots
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    Take me back to a time where my innocence's was still pure
    A time when I did not carry these demons that currently have a firm grip within my adult life
    Take me back to that shameful childhood I lived through and make it fictional
    Make the childhood I ached for, longed for, and deserved so very badly factual.
    Take me back to a time when my innocence's was still pure
    A time when I did not know that feeling of "being high"
    Take away this dark knowledge I acquired over my life
    Wipe my slate clean I beg of you




    Submitted on 2016-10-04 12:08:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This hit me pretty hard... I can certainly relate to the feelings here. The desperate want of it all having been different. Because whatever negativity happens to us as children grows with us into adulthood. The pain, the anger, the fear, can all be crippling. Though I don't particularly enjoy reading painful material, sometimes our best writings come from our hurt. If this is written from your own life experience, I am deeply sorry for whatever you had to go through. Thanks for sharing your work.

    -Tesla
    | Posted on 2016-11-13 00:00:00 | by TeslaKoyal | [ Reply to This ]


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