Two Worlds -------------------------------------------
I am trapped between two worlds
That of color
And this...
A world only consisting of various grays
Sentenced to a life of grief and hardship
Only ever seeking out the distrust this world has only ever offered to me
Always exploring every oxymoron and back handed compliments life has stood for
Yet, I have suddenly been able to experience a world that is not so drab and dreary
Where I am able to breathe in the colors this new world has to offer
Giving my body a new sense of life
However, I am far too comfortable within this bitter colorless world
Grown accustomed is an understatement
More like thrived within these cruel conditions
Waiting ... Expecting the other shoe to drop
Adapted to living in constant fear
My environment has condemned me to a life of grief with no parole
My loss of loved ones has left me knowing that joy is only a moment without suffering
I am trapped between two worlds
That of color
And this....
I wish the structure had mirrored your topic. Had this been a textualized portrait rather than perhaps simple expression of what you have proposed i believe as far as poetry goes this would have been a lot stronger. I am no hater when it comes to laying out emotions via writing and so i am not mad about what you did give us, it did leave me wanting more, this idea of two worlds.
I don't know, this text is too plain, it reads too much like a description rather than a poem. You need to twist the words a bit more, to surprise the reader with something. With some work, you could make something out of this, even if it's just cleaning the format and making it more nice to read...
Submission Name: Two Worlds
