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    dots Submission Name: Absencedots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAbsencedots
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    She persists in mystery and tranquility
    while I struggle to hold our history inside
    close to my heart while parting with weakness
    this treatment is unbearable
    still harbor love together
    separated from the source
    never able to explore
    every attempt is met
    with spontaneous rejection
    leaving me alone with absence
    where blame is begging to be placed
    and do find me guilty
    so I carve out this soul
    to make room for the abuse
    find question for my very nature
    universally neglected
    my matter seems the only constant
    leading back to me finding fault
    in myself reflected




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