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    dots Submission Name: Glacial Eyesdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 462
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 586



    Description:
       If it helps, I know it's not a word, and I know her eyes aren't blue.


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    dotsGlacial Eyesdots
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    Her eyes were winter in a forest
    ocean mist and aurora borealis
    flawless but raw in purest sense
    heather blue with bits of seafoam
    glacial crystals as resonant soul
    loud like heaven's angels in chorus
    deep like we packed that old Taurus
    in challenge
    and her whole being spoke to me
    through those panes of liquid glass
    bright and full and honest with
    the way she'd smile at me openly
    or laugh rich when I was joking
    that love lead to us closening
    and I don't regret a moment




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