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Author: Mithrandir
ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452 /681 /113
Words: 131
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Like a ghost
From yesterday
You exist
In every moment

Even though
Our paths diverged
Countless years before

Many times
I thought
I had escaped you

So many times
I was wrong

You have been
You are
And always will be
My regret

How can
I cut these ties
I'm tired of being
Moored in this place

Like a ghost of yesterday
You reverberate
Across the years
Making this longing endure ever on

I miss the you
Who knew me
So many years ago

But as it has been said
You can't go home again
So here I stand as always
Trying to let you go

When all I ever wanted
Was to let you in

Submitted on 2016-10-07 13:35:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Your work has matured. Good form.
| Posted on 2016-10-13 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]
  The title caught my eye so I needed to pop in and read. I also have a poem with the same title and I invite you to stop by and check it out. Regret is so individual, based on life circumstances and mistakes that can last for eternity. A constant reminder of what could have been or what never was. In your circumstance, a person lost. My only recommendation is to add more insight into the circumstances that brought about the regret itself. It may help the reader relate to the feeling rather than just a "love lost" identity.
| Posted on 2016-10-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]

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