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    dots Submission Name: Regretdots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsRegretdots
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    Like a ghost
    From yesterday
    You exist
    In every moment

    Even though
    Our paths diverged
    Countless years before

    Many times
    I thought
    I had escaped you

    So many times
    I was wrong

    You have been
    You are
    And always will be
    My regret

    How can
    I cut these ties
    I'm tired of being
    Moored in this place

    Like a ghost of yesterday
    You reverberate
    Across the years
    Making this longing endure ever on

    I miss the you
    Who knew me
    So many years ago

    But as it has been said
    You can't go home again
    So here I stand as always
    Trying to let you go

    When all I ever wanted
    Was to let you in





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      Your work has matured. Good form.
    | Posted on 2016-10-13 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      The title caught my eye so I needed to pop in and read. I also have a poem with the same title and I invite you to stop by and check it out. Regret is so individual, based on life circumstances and mistakes that can last for eternity. A constant reminder of what could have been or what never was. In your circumstance, a person lost. My only recommendation is to add more insight into the circumstances that brought about the regret itself. It may help the reader relate to the feeling rather than just a "love lost" identity.
    | Posted on 2016-10-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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