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    dots Submission Name: Raindots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 409
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       Raining this morning.


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    dotsRaindots
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    Like small soldiers they fall hard on asphalt
    Deteriorate pavement no halt
    They move in a sequence and create molecules
    Sometimes to hurt us or help no subdue
    In Noah's time it flooded the world
    It turmoils in oceans with cyclones that swirl
    In my neighborhood it eroded murals
    In mountains water flows pure though
    In local villages harvest grows
    River banks, lakes, oceans, you don't know
    Where it might go
    Pavement stays slippery lives are lost
    California drought time to get it back
    At all cost
    RAIN




    Submitted on 2016-10-17 06:59:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know what to say about the rhyming pattern. It might work in a freestyle but I don't think this works in a poem. Imo you either rhyme perfectly when you write a poem or don't rhyme at all...
    | Posted on 2016-10-20 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah that's what we need, incantations, spells, I'm considering performing a rain dance. This water rationing is getting old.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2016-10-17 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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