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    dots Submission Name: Pleasedots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 75/191/246
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsPleasedots
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    As eyes sink back,
    into an expanding obsidian,
    as flame and fear rise,
    into poignant oblivion,
    all that could be said,
    “please…”

    All that was spoken,
    turned into “why’s” of contrition,
    as the warmth of life derides,
    into that fiery ending.




    Submitted on 2016-10-19 19:35:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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