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    dots Submission Name: Hologramdots
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    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    33/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 1055/434/90
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 487
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2539



    Description:
       This is a really old poem of mine. I never posted it here because I knew formatting would be a bitch to do on this site and without the proper format the poem loses all sense. It didn't come out exactly as it should but it's close enough. Here it is like it should be viewed, just copy the link in your browser if you want to see it properly formatted: http://orig01.deviantart.net/47ec/f/2016/293/c/8/hologram_by_paradoxone-dalp9z5.jpg I also uploaded it as my avatar for now, cause I know people are too lazy to check out the link. :D


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    This world is not enough

    All boundaries collapse inside

    As the moon melts under the stars

    This world is not enough

    At all costs new meaning shall be found

    Above galaxy, notions, freedom and denial

    This world is not enough

    Alleviate pressure with emotion, high and strong

    Another form of triangular vision shall burst into now

    This world is not enough

    Around the tunnel of vision triangular sharks surf on each other

    A single point melts madness into a giant spiral of teeth seeking blood

    This world is not enough

    Alien feelings create ruptures in the flesh of space forever spinning gore and truth

    This world is hollow

    Alas trampled cells repel and speak a red language or a dance of might and light

    This world is not enough

    A single point melts madness into a giant spiral of teeth seeking blood

    Around the tunnel of vision triangular sharks surf on each other

    This world is not enough

    Another form of triangular vision shall burst into now

    Alleviate pressure with emotion, high and strong

    This world is not enough

    Above galaxy, notions, freedom and denial

    At all costs new meaning shall be found

    This world is not enough

    As the moon melts under the stars

    All boundaries collapse inside

    This world is not enough




    Submitted on 2016-10-20 00:29:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First of all, I'm so happy to hear from you!! I only got to your first comment because, let's face it you posted a new piece and that's way more fascinating.

    Second of all, the urgency in the poem juxtaposed against this zen/LSD vibe really works. I adore it.

    Next, the format works with the poem, to sort of give you that galaxy effect. Although, you can see the format at work better in your profile picture.

    Favorite line has got to be, "Alas trampled cells repel and speak a red language or a dance of might and light" F*cking stunning.
    | Posted on 2016-11-06 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]
      So I guess you are going to have to tell me exactly what this one signifies.I caught on to the format, the tendencies of this piece to manifest a fractal, the repitition of triangles, things happening in 3s.

    If you just read this and apply the literal meaning to the format I come up with the depiction of your piece mirroring the reality we live in. The world is not enough goes from an opinion to a truth in this piece BC of that.

    My favorite part had to be the imagery of shark teeth, the meltiness of reality like a surreal painting. I think this would be beautiful accompanied with a surreal, abstract impressionistic, fractally picture.

    Thank you for sharing despite your initial hesitation. I loved the mirrored format, I am a big fan of geometry and how reflections and parallels fit into theories of existence. This piece brought me that.
    | Posted on 2016-10-30 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds like an alien voice from the deep singing its out heart out to an otherwordly reality of some kind. I can actually hear ambient and electronic music flow through this piece. Enchanting. I really like this, it speaks volumes and seeps into the depth of my heart. (Sorry if this sounds strange its just the way I think)
    | Posted on 2016-10-20 00:00:00 | by ShadowParadox | [ Reply to This ]


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