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    dots Submission Name: Perhaps dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.08 - 366/364/154
    Words: 288
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPerhaps dots
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    Perhaps its as you say, honey darlin’
    That I’m too passionate, too possessive, and too poetic

    (That I feel too deeply, or that I see too grandly,
    Or that I hold too tightly…
    Even that I hide my sadness in my smile
    And carry my sorrow between my teeth)

    But when I saw that incandescent purple
    Strike from within the black clouds
    I couldn’t help but think of you

    Or if you think of me
    Or if your hips still sway when you’re excited
    Or if you still hold your mouth and lean forward while you laugh

    Or is it that I’ve faded in you?
    Like the moon that dissolves to dust each dawn

    I can’t really say that we were ever lovers
    I can’t really tell if we were even friends

    We just were –

    In part connected with that which divides
    Resident in the dichotomous unknown of the sun and moon
    Like the polarity of atoms that grasp
    But cannot meet to keep the charge

    But I am the moon that resolves itself each evening to rule the night-

    So I will rise to love you in the darkness
    Where the avenue lights have all blown out
    Where it’s too dead to dream
    Where everyone is asleep in diffused gray
    And the streets are flecked red with remnant wonder

    Your absence looms from your watchtower
    Where I kneel beneath the silent trees
    And gather my raisin cakes, wine, and incense to pray

    Here I will hope and wait for you
    Like the daisy waits in hope for the sun

    DiCicco Cosentino




    Submitted on 2016-11-05 18:39:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed this poem, except the ending. I think you could have done much better there. That image just doesn't fit with the rest of the poem. Anyway that's just my impression, good write overall...
    | Posted on 2016-11-05 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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