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    dots Submission Name: Ship Wreckeddots
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    Author: Carosuel
    ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 96/73/28
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 737
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    Bytes: 702



    Description:
       The first half to a duet. This half is me deciding to get a divorce, the second is me deciding not to. (I didn't get the divorce, we're doing better than we have in a long time actually.)


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    dotsShip Wreckeddots
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    Sweeping broadly, but impotently,
    I could hardly see it there then.
    Over the sea and shore and jagged rock,
    that prescient warning--
    dismissed as ramblings of bitter men.

    The sails tore like flesh from bone,
    the mast hung feeble and fractured,
    the crow's nest drifted away from me,
    and amidst the anxious sea, I was captured.

    An astral aria wove her watery fingers,
    through my hair and dragged me under.
    Flailing downward, kicking the flotsam asunder,
    through fathoms and leagues, as black as her soul.
    The intangible danger sat mute on my lips.
    Oh, my love, we deserved this




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    ||| Comments |||
      Your imagery is spot on. So this is why I have writer's block. My muse passed to you. <3
    | Posted on 2017-04-29 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the dark imagery in this. Some of my favorite paintings are of a sunset at sea. But I really liked these lines:"that prescient warning--dismissed as ramblings of bitter men." I dunno why but that stood out for me in this poem as the best part...
    | Posted on 2016-11-07 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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