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    dots Submission Name: I am...dots
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    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 366/359/149
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 558
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    Description:
       number 4 in a day and a half...as with all of my poems, this is a second draft and needs polishing.


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    dotsI am...dots
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    I am the moon that bows to kiss the sea of your feet-
    And run my tongue across your salty skin and savor your honey-accented lips

    I am the lark that sings at night-
    He that heaves his silver song into the black of the blackest night

    I am the sky that holds the sagacious stars-
    Like the innocent earth holds the tender shoots of poppies and ponders the roots

    I am the tempest at the edge of the horizon-
    A wild bloodthirsty beast; birth in savagery, wounded, and famished

    I am the thief that reached for zenith-
    He that rose up and stole the plum of love from the corner of your mouth

    I am the wilderness in your soul-
    Dark and sweet and heavy with mystery and full of fury

    I am the epiphany in the tongue of a child-
    That which shatters euthyphro; pious and beloved by God

    I am the poet whose fingers are drenched with ink-
    He that bleeds the taut blue sky and scribbles upon cave walls

    I am the incandescent, swinging, swirling, whirling sun-
    He that rises each morning to hold your groggy face and kiss your brow

    I’m sinking, spinning, twirling into the stratum of your cells…
    Do you sense me? Do you love me? Do you care?

    DiCicco Cosentino




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