Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: I am...dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: rev.jpfadeproof
    ASL Info:    27/m/nyc
    Elite Ratio:    6.08 - 366/364/154
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 682
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1428



    Description:
       number 4 in a day and a half...as with all of my poems, this is a second draft and needs polishing.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsI am...dots
    -------------------------------------------


    I am the moon that bows to kiss the sea of your feet-
    And run my tongue across your salty skin and savor your honey-accented lips

    I am the lark that sings at night-
    He that heaves his silver song into the black of the blackest night

    I am the sky that holds the sagacious stars-
    Like the innocent earth holds the tender shoots of poppies and ponders the roots

    I am the tempest at the edge of the horizon-
    A wild bloodthirsty beast; birth in savagery, wounded, and famished

    I am the thief that reached for zenith-
    He that rose up and stole the plum of love from the corner of your mouth

    I am the wilderness in your soul-
    Dark and sweet and heavy with mystery and full of fury

    I am the epiphany in the tongue of a child-
    That which shatters euthyphro; pious and beloved by God

    I am the poet whose fingers are drenched with ink-
    He that bleeds the taut blue sky and scribbles upon cave walls

    I am the incandescent, swinging, swirling, whirling sun-
    He that rises each morning to hold your groggy face and kiss your brow

    I’m sinking, spinning, twirling into the stratum of your cells…
    Do you sense me? Do you love me? Do you care?

    DiCicco Cosentino




    Submitted on 2016-11-07 14:24:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    201549

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Push written by JanePlane
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    To written by SavedDragon
    Giving written by jjd
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    In the end written by Janesaddiction
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry